This is what I have of the video so far.
0.00-0.24; presently far too long, and more content is needed here to cutaway and set the scene.
- More close ups of setting
- More direction needed for the actor, so as to show her emotional range. (Miss Barton has questioned my choice of actor, but I have assured her that Molly is the most talented actress I know, it is simply down to other factors that this may not yet have come across).
1:19-1:57; after my initial first edit of the video, I got some people to feedback on the video and tell me what I needed to improve on; their feedback was mainly that I needed the drop to be more fast paced, to reinforce the idea that she is tripping. I have started to work on this, as shown from 1:19-1:26. This is the speed of editing that I want for the entirety of those sections, just at the moment, since the shoot is incomplete, I need to leave space for the rest of the content to fit.
For the first drop all I need now is to film the fireworks, sparklers and smoke bomb section.
1:26-1:57 is so far, just the stills between the main motifs. The stills have intertextual references, linking to the garden of eden, but that will be explained in a separate post.
2:13-2:23; very rough start to the second drop. This drop is an exploration of fear, hence the drowning in the bath, and gravestones - links to death and the afterlife (juxtaposing garden of eden in drop 1).
For the completion of this section I have a bit more to film; use of blood as opposed to pink paint to contrast with the positivity of the previous section (more links to death and an intertextual link to Carrie), being tangles in a black, translucent fabric, and arms pulling her backward into darkness.
For your evaluation to make sense you need to upload the raw footage you are evaluating.
ReplyDeleteAdvice: You need to be very strict with the planning of your music video and be subtle with your references to drug use and etc. For example in Africa Shox the appeal, the long shelf life is because of the multi layered interpretations represented by camera angles and movement.
Therefore your performer's dysfunctional behaviour could be open to interpretation. Thus explicit shots of drugs and pill popping could be cheesy and leave little for the audience to chew on.
The notion of suicide or death, again this could be open to interpretation or an existential experience not explicit with the message "take drugs and die" which is simplistic.
The more you use subtle hints, strong cinematography and performances the better. You need to dangle ideas through implication so audiences can construct their own interpretation.
Feedback on raw footage posted above:
ReplyDelete1) Transitions: from beginning to 0.26 try dissolves as this will amplify the dreamlike quality you are establishing.
2) 0.26-0.42 too slow, speed up transitions and for the rest of your rough cut.
3) Another narrative structure: Punctuate the shots of the performer on the bed with flashes of coloured footage!!! Like flickering dreams that are disjointed.
Something to chew on but in this cut the transitions are rather laboured.